1. Read "Chapter 9: Revising an Essay" in Between Worlds (pgs. 381 - 403)
2. Complete revision of Writing Project 1: Creative Nonfiction. Make sure to attach your first draft and your peer reviews when submitting on Tuesday.
3. Read "Diabesity: A Crisis in an Expanding Country" by Jane E. Brody (204 -208)
Up for Discussion:
One of the main skills you should already possess upon entering this class is the ability to cull important information from a text. I can't help but notice, however, that we're a bit rusty at this. To practice this skill, I'd like you to post a comment in which you examine the thesis, tone, main points, and support that Jane E. Brody uses in her essay "Diabesity." You can simply list them like this:
Thesis: ...
Tone: ...
Main Points:
1 - ...
2 - ...
3 - ...
Support: ...
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Thesis:Excess weight is a very serious and costly hea;th problem in America.
ReplyDeleteTone: The tone is somewhat upset but informative at the same time.
Main Points:
1.Genes can cause diabetes or prediabetes
2.Consuming to much fats food in a week
3. America's Medical Structure
Thesis: Diabetes and Obesity have increased drastically over the past few decades and we have to take control into our own hands to stop the rates of going up.
ReplyDeleteTone: Urgent
Main Points:
1. Diabesity have increased in an alarming rate
2. Causes and Effects of Diabesity
3. Ways we can change that epdemic
Support:
1. Given specific number and facts of the increased rate
2. Genes and Eating habits are the main causes
3. Microwave and Refrigerators at work place, using stairs instead of elevators, fills vending machines with more healthful items.
thesis: i think the thesis is that many people fail to realize what a problem being obese can be
ReplyDeletetone: it almost had a pleading tone
main points:
1 obesity is a rising porblem
2 ways to prevent gaining weight to prevent diabetes
3 diabetes can be controlled or prevented if certain measures are takin
Thesis: Diabetes and Obesity have become a health crisis in America; it is basically being ignored by society.
ReplyDeleteTone: The tone seems bothered, appauled, and even angry.
Main Points:
1 - Americas economic structure makes it easier to eat unhealthy foods.
2 - Not everyone has an easy access to medical care.
3 - Family history& Genes may make people more prone to these diseases if they don't take care of themselves in the first place.
Support:
- Clinical Trials, Studies, & Statistics show the outrageous numbers that prove that the number of people struggling with Obesity and Diabetes have skyrocketed.
Thesis: Diabetes is a harmful disease and not only adults suffer from it children do also.
ReplyDeleteTone: A little depressing but there is a solution to change your life.
Main Points:
1. The economic structure that makes it cheaper to eat junk foods such as fries than fruits.
2. Diabetes can be increased at any time.
3. Obesity and diabetes can be controlled.
Support:
Many people would go to restaurants or grocery stores to buy oily or sugary foods instead of buying fruits or vegetables.
Thesis: Diabetes is a disease that has increase over the years and even young adults are in risk of getting it.
ReplyDeleteTone: It gives you hope that people can change the way their life just by eating better.
Main Points
1. There are too many people with Diabetes.
2. Many people dont get the support they need.
3. There are too many junk food that people can't control themselves. They need to be able to control what they eat.
Support:
There are many healthy restaurants that people can go to and prevent eating junk food. It will help people to eat better by cooking their own food rather than buying fast food because is cheaper.
thesis diabeties is a big thing affecting our people today.
ReplyDeleteTone: persuasive
Main points
1.obesity
2.diabities
3.cholestorol
Support: textbooks,statistics,articles
Thesis: Diabeties is a big issue in today's society
ReplyDeleteTone: informative
Main points:
1. eating unhealthy
2. no weight management
3. inherited
Support: medical attention, articles, family